Sela Locke

My, my, my. How silly you were. I would critique, but rather imagine, as usual, that I would look poor, puny, and particularly pathetic. So - I love it, especially ...

Wow, Prok. Way to really give him a review. -JKnudge&eyeroll- I liked it - the story didn't info dump too much, and the main character seemed to be getting a ...

Alright! I'm not one much for nitpicking, and especially not when the actual work needs help. In your case, it really does. Now, don't get me wrong -- not all ...

I know nobody really read the second chapter, but I'll put the third one on anyways. Eheheh. “Ah, what are you doing, m’dear?” Galyda had no idea how, but as ...

All right! I suppose, since you asked, I can stop a moment to review this interesting work. A few nitpicks first... The night was dark and moonless.Clouds crowded the sky.Down ...

I'm not going to nitpick, but I'm really curious - do you want us to despise Marshall? Because I sure as heck do. He's a whiny, snappy, somewhat slow guy ...

Thanks Prok and Chern! I'll need to find some time for those edits soon. ^_^ Here's chapter two! Oh - and I put this on with only one read-over, so ...

Wow. See, Tote, here's the awesome thing about you, and your ridiculous writing skills. You can make no sense at all, and I still get it. I've never, ever found ...

Uh, n-nope. Nope. I don't get it. Why are you so ridiculously good? It's simply not fair. But I do like the reference to Companions of the Night... -clingstoEthan- Ahem! ...

I don't know if these were actually supposed to be vampires, but they were so watered down I was almost reminded of Edward Cullen. Vamps are predators, evil-doers, and murderers. ...

I liked the structure and the style - not bad at all. I suggest reading it over for the occasional typo or punctuation mistake. Other than that, no need for ...

What? Yes, this is a short story. It should be about three chapters long. 'S for a class thing I have. He didn’t know where he could possibly be, or ...

Thanks. I really wanted to try this after I subjected myself to Twi. It was simply too tempting. And I'd been telling myself I would for quite some time before ...

I certainly am not trying to insult either. Usually people who switch tenses like that have learned a different language first, that's all. And I don't think that your story ...

Okay, I don't know if English is your first language, but there were oodles of tense mistakes in this chapter. You went from past to present and present to past ...